Thoughts on rereading the chapters set in Port Royal...

[rispacooper]

* The writing is awful and clunky

* Rene apparently thinks he's trapped inside 'Madame Butterfly'

* I compare Ben to Etienne in a really strange way

* James continues to silently beg Etienne to jump him and is getting annoyed that Etienne won't. (i.e. please take the decision away from me Etienne and just fuck me)

* I really need to edit

* Mirena is hot

* (in my head) when Honore comes to kidnap Etienne, Etienne was sleeping and having a strange, sweaty fantasy about James and a desk and Honore sort of stopped to stare at him for a moment in fascination

* I really need to edit

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[rispacooper.livejournal.com]

* (in my head) when Honore comes to kidnap Etienne, Etienne was sleeping and having a strange, sweaty fantasy about James and a desk and Honore sort of stopped to stare at him for a moment in fascination

Yes, I want to read this scene, like OMG. Hot. James over a desk. Foreshadowing of James and Rene in the office before they are interupted by that master of ill-timing, Ben.


I wish Pooky would write that scene, Honore finding him I mean, since she wuvs him, but she still finds Etienne creepy.

Meanwhile I was thinking Ben and Etienne never interact onscreen (on page?), but they do, sort of. Weird.